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    dots Submission Name: Nature's Songdots
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    Author: syrekata
    ASL Info:    17/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 7/7/6
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 853
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this a couple of years ago. I was down near the river (in a part where you seem totally cut of from the city) and this poem just came to me. Since then I have altered it a bit but this basically describes what it was like down there.


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    dotsNature's Songdots
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    Beauty abounds in Nature’s true sounds.

    A duck merely swimming, or singing a song?
    Water is falling, humming along.
    Whispering are the trees,
    With the help of the bees,
    Telling the story,
    Of Nature's pure glory.

    Am I a part of this song?
    Should I sing along?
    Or is listening the key,
    That will deliver to me ....

    My thoughts start to drift
    As my spirit does lift
    I float oh so high
    And sounds pass me by
    But I will not worry,
    Nature's not in a hurry.

    She will keep singing,
    The knowledge she's bringing,
    Until I have heard,
    Every last word.




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      I enjoy sitting on the beach, letting the sand run through my fingers like silky talcum power.

    While the waves of the ocean pound the shore in a concert free to all.

    This lilting paean to nature is wonderfully expressed and well writen.
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]
      I came to your page looking for another great fantasy story, but this poem works just fine.

    Even though your rhythm isn't 100% constant, it flows very well for the most part. For some reason instead of

    "But I will not worry,
    For Nature's in no hurry."

    my brain wants to hear

    "But I will not worry,
    Nature's not in a hurry."

    And it wants one less syllable in
    "She will keep singing,
    The knowledge she is bringing,"

    Perhaps

    "She will keep singing,
    The knowledge she's bringing,"

    I'm no expert in meter, but it seems smoother that way to me.

    Thanks for sharing



    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I my self have ofte felt this way when sitting alone and listening to the earth, sky and nature sing of their bounless knowledge. It is truly amazing the way your poem conveyed so much in so short a poem it is very good. Keep it up
    Raye
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good work here. I know a good write when I see one. First off don't change a thing about it, it's perfect just how it is. If the words were changed even a little the meanning would not play from so deep.

    This poem reminds me of two songs. One, it reminds me of Jimi Hendrix,s when the wind cries mary. We come into a peacfull humming of nature only creating bad vib with sorrow, becoming a greedy fearfull being who create our own hell of screaming life, fading into tears crying of our fatefull end. Wondering if mother earth will remember our wicked song or if her voice is only singing the saddnes she knows of her own death and end.

    Sorry I got carried away.

    The other song this reminds me of is Led Zeppelin stairway to heaven. You write of hearing the trees and nature or if you may be a part of this song as well. It reminds me of how the song talks of just being yourself and not following something you don't believe in. be leader not a follower and mother nature will bring mass distruction butt thats just spring cleaning not the end ofthe world, and the way you truely feel and view life and love is your own heaven or hell, don't create your own hell by following fear of not reaching heaven. LIKE THE SONG, why build a stairway when your stairway lies on the whispering wind.

    Sorry I wrote so long about that as well, but even though your write was not exactly about those songs, I just wanted to tell you why your poem reminded me of how those songs have a meaning to me that let me seek your words so deep & true.
    This is going as a fave. thanx for sharing it & sorry i ran on with some of my writting.

    jermwerm
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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