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what went wrong?

Author: Kaila Turley
ASL Info:    15/F
Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 52 /43 /18
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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this is about a 15 year old girl falling in love and nothing going her way. and she wants to know why and what she done

what went wrong?

what went wrong with us?
was it me ... was it you?
was it teh fact you lied?
still late at night before i sleep,
i ask myself what went wrong?
i have spent that last 9 months with you,
and everyday i love you a little more,
so what went wrong?
i can't keep asking myself this question,
i cant't keep waiting for you,
to grow up,
and see you love me too,
what went wrong?
i did everything right ,
but still you hurt me,
what went wrong?
i love you the only way a,
15 year old girl can love,
but nothing went right,
i guess i might never know,
===== what went wrong?=====

Submitted on 2006-02-26 10:25:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It is a good poem but a little repetative with the what went wrong park. This poem also needs a little more work on the line structure of it. The idea was really good in a relationship there are unseen problems that people don't see that will lead to the end of a relationship I knwo alot of these things are really personal and have happened to u and u knwo I'm here for you when ever u need me

| Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

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