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    dots Submission Name: the third speakerdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 499
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 898



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       not alot to say about this......I like it though....since I say that...prolly nobody else will...aint that fucked up


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    I feel like getting high, is no longer needed
    I used to have do it twice a day, to be happy I had to get weeded
    but since I"ve met you, I don't really need it
    still feels good, but I just don't really need it
    I hope that your hearing what I"m trying to say
    I'd prolly die if you left, please don't go away
    you bring the attitude of love into this Tri- I'd say
    please believe that I love you and I want you to stay
    I got so many demons, you seem to keep them at bey
    girl, I just wanna creep up on you if I could, if I may
    nothing thats to dirty, is my hand here ok?
    I wanna let you know, aura shines like a ray
    I love it when you talk like that and say O-Tay
    love it when you speak my name, and say oh- J.!
    blood flowin out the cut, I guess thats fo' me (may)




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      i liked this one. the last line seemed weak but that's the only problem i saw with this one. this was really sweet. u should show this to ur girl.

    I hope that your hearing what I"m trying to say
    I'd prolly die if you left, please don't go away

    please believe that I love you and I want you to stay
    I got so many demons, you seem to keep them at bey
    girl, I just wanna creep up on you if I could, if I may
    nothing thats to dirty, is my hand here ok?
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah this was good and all that [censored] but u are better off without her anyway. She was no good for u n-e-ways. U need to find someone who can appriciate u for who u r and all that. So u keep it up and hold ur head high. We love ya.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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