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    dots Submission Name: on fire verse 2dots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
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    dotson fire verse 2dots

    fuckin with the doc, you on you on a death bed
    can't dispose of us, you knocked down, blood is soon to be shed
    what goes around comes around, look where, you, it's lead
    fuck you and your momma bitch, now you dead
    creemate your body, turned to ashes
    thats what they say we come from, they tellin me they know what rational is
    fuck them, I push'em out the way
    this violent mother fucker got shit to say
    can't hold me back bitch I"m already here
    can't stop the prophecies of the man in the mirror
    Can't watch the armegedon, as it draws nearer
    death is coming, bitch, I know thats your fear
    stomp a mud hole in that ass, you wanna disrespect
    I leave I mother fucker glistening red
    I don't give a fuck about what was said
    I got 12 bullets in the clip, to you they fed

    Chorus 2x

    Submitted on 2006-02-26 13:00:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      These verses were good based on the emotion. LYrically you could through some punches in there. I learned that when you put punchlines into verses then its raises the level automatically.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      ummm. this one was alright. sounds like a freestyle to me. are u always angry or do u just write this way.

    can't hold me back [censored] I"m already here
    can't stop the prophecies of the man in the mirror
    Can't watch the armegedon, as it draws nearer
    death is coming, [censored], I know thats your fear

    these were the only lines that i liked in this one. work on the third verse. i wanna read it
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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