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    dots Submission Name: Paranoiddots
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    Author: Harshini
    ASL Info:    18/male/PA
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 112
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 685



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       Hello again, just thought I would put this one in too. Really nothing I can say about it, I read some E.A. Poe and this turned out the next day. I know its simple and childish but it was fun to write.


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    dotsParanoiddots
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    The dark eerie clothe shivered in the wind
    Savage chaos lurked in every corner’s fold
    Shadows traveled along the walls so dim
    Shaking was the hand, a candle it did hold.
    Fear had formed in the heart once of stone
    What could it be lurking in his home
    Could it skin him, beat him and break his bones
    The candle though bright hardly shown.
    Squeakily his voice sounds, “Who’s there?”
    Nothing returned but the deafening gale
    Even more fear came raising his hair
    The air turned musty and tasted quite stale.
    Looking hard to see the figure by the mat
    Oh thank god, it was just his pussycat.




    Submitted on 2006-02-26 20:04:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ok this was a good write.i liked the imagry it produced.However, the ending about the pussycat, that kinda threw off the whole creepy scene it had in the beginning.it didnt add up with the first part.anyway some advice make the ending match the beginning.its like talking about gummy bears and at the end of the sentence yer talking about the moon.two dif.things
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]



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