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    dots Submission Name: Crystal Mountain Roaddots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       Wandering the deserts of Nevada near Sand Mountain - 16 miles was how far down the old mine road I went to find a nice gully of crystals and I just thought of what it must have been like back in the days of gold/silver/etc. mining.


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    16 miles down Crystal Mountain Road...
    The silence as soothing as the winter
    desert sun.

    16 miles to the mystery ~
    mind on infamy and riches...
    hand on gun.

    32 minutes seems a lifetime past -
    my body as weathered as
    this ancient desert land.

    32 miles silent sarcophagus
    dried up life is now
    mountain of sand

    1 more mile remains on this path;
    dark journey
    drawn 2 light.

    1 more minute 2 live
    or give up the fight.

    The miner's story down Crystal Mountain Road -
    A true lifetime in search of Motherlode.....

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    Watch out! The miners have guns! Pow! Pow! Rat-a-tat-tat! Krakow!

    Running down Crystal Mountain Road to the body that is buried in the sand by the miner who is currently forcing people to eat lead.

    32? Why 32? Why not 42? 42 = The life, the univer and everything.

    What is the miner fighting for? I wish I could understand this. When I saw the title I was thinking:

    "OZ.....OZ....Wizard of ID!"

    And then I read and:
    See above comments

    What is it about? I can't find a pathway in my mind to explain it. I still kinda liked it. But not as much as your other ones.
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. Only minor nit would be to write out the numbers (thirty-two). Nice job here with the descriptions and imgery.


    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is fantastic
    I really like how you refered to death as a mountain of sand
    That line is so perfect
    I agree with Graeme
    The countdown effect is very creative
    Fantastic Write
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      As always, Tiff, you come up with a different way to get a story across. I also like the countdown effect, and I like the constant referral to the past.

    It must have been times indeed...I can see you with a pick over your shoulder chewin' tobaccy and saying "consarnit" and "dagnabbit"

    Very nice. Crystal princess

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the count down you used in this, it made the story more intense. I love pieces that have real life history added in it. you spun a tale of present and past as if they were one. Very good writing and details. Isn't great what can inspire you at times? Great story Tiff.

    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very good it was like i was wandering there with you
    very nice indeed i needed to read something up beat after working on this cold day in canada

    hope all is good
    thanx for the comments
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It brought back many memories to me of when I was a coal miner.

    I could tell you many a tale of digging inside Mother Earth.

    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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