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i look in the mirror


Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51 /52 /39
Words: 153
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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this is yet another poem for jon ( when arn't my poems for jon) that is why I write is for him .
any way please tell me what you think turthfully

thank you storm


i look in the mirror



I look in the mirror and all I see
is my ugly face lookin back at me
how could jon have loved me
that is what I want to know but
I'll find out some day
hopefully soon
I pull the blade across my wrist and wisper
here i come to you jon
I need to get to you
I need to see you
Jon I have a big thing to tell you I promises you that i would n't folow you every were i have broken that promise and will see you soon I just wish that there was another way to get to you Jon .
I miss you jon and even though i would n't kill my self to see you I see you in my dreams.
I love you jon and i will always love you .




Submitted on 2006-02-27 18:33:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  dealing with a death is always hard, i can't imagine going through what you're going through right now. be strong, remember the amazing times you had together. stay strong. and keep writing, hopefully it is helping you get through, i know it helps me through the tough times.
| Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by jen531 | [ Reply to This ]
  Is Jon a girl? I didn't think so from the name, but you are a guy, so I'm really hoping that Jon is a girl.
It sounds like you're dealing with a breakup. I can't really give you any personal advice, cause I've never been in a breakup, but, here's what I think I'd do- get a horse, go for a ride, and have a new hobby ;)
| Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]


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