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    dots Submission Name: i look in the mirrordots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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        this is yet another poem for jon ( when arn't my poems for jon) that is why I write is for him .
    any way please tell me what you think turthfully

    thank you storm


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    dotsi look in the mirrordots
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    I look in the mirror and all I see
    is my ugly face lookin back at me
    how could jon have loved me
    that is what I want to know but
    I'll find out some day
    hopefully soon
    I pull the blade across my wrist and wisper
    here i come to you jon
    I need to get to you
    I need to see you
    Jon I have a big thing to tell you I promises you that i would n't folow you every were i have broken that promise and will see you soon I just wish that there was another way to get to you Jon .
    I miss you jon and even though i would n't kill my self to see you I see you in my dreams.
    I love you jon and i will always love you .




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      dealing with a death is always hard, i can't imagine going through what you're going through right now. be strong, remember the amazing times you had together. stay strong. and keep writing, hopefully it is helping you get through, i know it helps me through the tough times.
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by jen531 | [ Reply to This ]
      Is Jon a girl? I didn't think so from the name, but you are a guy, so I'm really hoping that Jon is a girl.
    It sounds like you're dealing with a breakup. I can't really give you any personal advice, cause I've never been in a breakup, but, here's what I think I'd do- get a horse, go for a ride, and have a new hobby ;)
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]


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