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Strive To Be Me (cont)...

Author: Kaila Turley
ASL Info:    15/F
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Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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not knowing if i am thr person who i need to be

Strive To Be Me (cont)...

somedays i wonder,
is everything right,
all in its place or where it feels it should be?
and i am always striving to be me.

i go on with life,
after heart break,
and broken dreams,
i just keep on walking,
always thinking back but never looking,
i am always on the strive to be me.

i say me like i know who i am,
i am lost,
i know the basics but i dont truly know me,
yes i am a person ,
and i feels things most ppl should feel.

when i think about me and my world around me ,
and who and what i want to be,
i always will ...
strive to be me

Submitted on 2006-02-28 10:38:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I certainly get the point in this piece that you are trying to get across, but feel you could do so much better with your work. Continue to write and i'll surely read your work.
| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really good Kaila this has to be one of the best poems of yours I've read. It is really showing that this site and you writing more is really helping you. this is very relatable people always try to do what they think is best for there friends and by doing so mess up there own life. you have ot fight for things that u want some times too and you have to remember that Kaial I'll ttyl keep writing
| Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem! i can truly relate to it. you can really tell that it came from your heart, and that u ment what you said. Good job!
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by frenchie_inlove | [ Reply to This ]

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