You have a few mistakes but this is one touching piece. The feelings that you possess for this person are heart pounding. Keep up the great work. Work on your punctuation and typo's. I had had harsh critiques last month but I improved. You can do it Tash. All Eyes On You!
I really liked this. I think that my favorite part was when you said "i bring the horizon of problem" Personnaly I thought that it had most of the emotion tangle up into it. I really don't have anything else to say except that I think that I'm going to check out some more of your work!!! Alyssa