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    dots Submission Name: Dirty Lovedots
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    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDirty Lovedots
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    Completely overpowered
    by every single kiss.
    I'm living off this drug
    that you left upon my lips.
    The addiction's taking over,
    I live to hear those words.
    I sold my very soul
    just for one more verse.
    As for all my guilty pleasures,
    I don't have them anymore.
    There's plain apathy directed
    at all the letters on my door.
    I love every dirty sin.
    I'll confess that my remorse is dead.
    Because all tangled in your sheets,
    is my conscience in your bed.




    Submitted on 2006-02-28 11:27:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the fact that you don't actually talk about the act of sex, but in the end you know what the poem was truly about. I love the reference of "poison" and "addiction". Good write!!
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem! I love that you've used the ABAB rhyming scheme, but you've used more uncommon words. I love your word choice...
    The emotion projected in this poem is great. I get a very strong sense of... Almost "frowned upon" happiness, in the sense that many people would think that what this poem is about is wrong.
    I'm the type of person that delights in making people uncomfortable. It expands their horizons. I love that you've written about it.

    I'm adding this to my favorites. And that's saying a lot, since this will be my only favorite.

    Thanks for the great piece,
    Andrea
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by T.O.S.R. | [ Reply to This ]
      well yah your join writing and love and the act of love.. that is awesome great and all adjetive you can imagine ... i really love it ... keep writing you are doing great ..
    so if you have time please take a loook to my writing and hoep you like my writings...and comment on it
    so take care
    peace and love
    and have a ncie day
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      It's like...ur my hero! I didn't read anything of yours i just reveled in your compilments, and...didn't read any of your poetry. Why do you enjoy mine so much, when your is so far superior? With your words you have to power to lift somone up, or to push the down into a hell of their memories...OMG i friggin LOVE YOU!
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm lovin it samm! god, i sound like a mcdonald's comercial. oh well. ON TO COMMENTING!

    I like how you really reflect what love/lust is like. my favorite part is
    "I'm living off this drug
    that you left upon my lips.
    The addiction's taking over,
    I live to hear those words."
    cause when u care about someone, u do get addicted to them. it's like everytime their go away u go through withdraw cause u need them. i loved it.
    love=obsession. and u proved it.

    -Kate

    P.S. i was gonna say something about commas, but i went back and reread it and realized u dont need them any where else. so nevermind.
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think that this was really dirty, but it was a bit naughty. Thats what it good!!! I loved the last 2 lines. I think that they carried most of the emotion, and mainly I think that they were the most climactic. I loved your word choices, and how you innuendod the part about his kissed being like drugs. This was a good write, and I think that I might just add this one to my favorites!!
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      lol Kate's so weird. "Commas"

    Ok anywhoooo

    I like how you described it as being a drug. It's disgusting how easily one can get addicted to something (or someONE, I should say).
    (But I dont mean that in a bad way.)
    I love the way you word things. It made me say "aww"
    The part:
    "As for all my guilty pleasures,
    I don't have them anymore"
    Made me feel sort of bad. It made me happy, which kind of brought me down. Do you know what I mean?
    That's one of the reasons you know it's good. Like I mentioned before, if it can make someone feel something, then you must be doing something right.
    Fo shizzle.
    <3 <- heart
    @>- <-Flower
    <- me
    <- you
    <- us

    lol Okay, I'm done. Sorry, I lost control of myself for a moment there.
    But anyways, Samm, I must say this is one of my favorites of yours. I love every wonderful word of it.
    You are my hero
    Byee Samm

    Love
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      really dirty bt a reflection of reality...i appreciate it when u use mechanical pun 2 describe stuff of ths nature, all d same its nice
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]


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