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    dots Submission Name: whispering in the tone of ....dots
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    Author: gigergirl
    ASL Info:    28/f/irish
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 12/24/20
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 551
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    Description:
       Since i am from Ireland and am aware of the conflicts between religions and the conflict that comes from hate and anger.It is alsoabout the victims and there families who carry on living instead of seeking revenge or getting ready to die they look for justice .


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    dotswhispering in the tone of ....dots
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    Whispering in the Tone of the Name


    The whispering tones from stone strong walls,
    Are beaten down by strangers calls.
    Sweet love of Clan and leanbh’s love are drawn together by peace bán dove.

    The whispering tones from stone strong walls,
    Are beaten down by strangers calls.
    You honestly feel times chance is near,
    But denying true love is holding fear.
    Your emotion is cruel with devils groan,
    But don’t forget a leanbh who can never moan.

    The whispering tones from stone strong walls,
    Are beaten down by strangers calls.
    Parent, brother, family spun;
    By revalation and damping fun.
    So telling many of heart and pain
    Are regained again by whip and chain.

    The whispering tones from stone strong walls,
    Are beaten down by strangers calls.
    Honesty with truth are spoken cruel,
    And heart of hearts are an open tool
    You expect the cruel to be so kind when unable to think or free crused mind.




    Submitted on 2006-02-28 11:29:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There were quite a few typos but all in all i appreciated the piece…it was good…the wording and the structure…I look forward to seeing a lot more of your stuff in the future.
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