Magic Mirror Baby by Glassy Eyed

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Submission Name: Magic Mirror Baby dots

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Author:	Glassy Eyed
ASL Info:	17/f
Elite Ratio:	3.8 - 550/427/187
Words:	86

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	188
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	610

Description:
This is kind of related to Magic Mirror, only it's switched perspectives...

Magic Mirror Baby dots

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Magic Mirror Baby,
Show me what I want to see,
Show everyone what they want to see;
Not you.
Never you.

Magic Mirror Baby,
Reflecting the world back from you,
So you're cool with everyone,
Never against anyone,
It's true.

Magic Mirror Baby,
What if you break?
Bad luck for seven years?
Seven brutal years where you have to be you?

Magic Mirror Baby,
You're shattered.
Now what'll you do?
You have to be you,
Do you even know how to do that?

Submitted on 2006-02-28 17:52:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the idea of this poem a lot...mirros reflect soo much more than just our image...it shows all the things we hate about oursleves...I think that I wish this poem was more about how the mirror cant lie to us...
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by haileebobailee | [ Reply to This ]
Yes! As good as the first one! An interesting and original concept!

Magic Mirror Baby,
What if you break?
Bad luck for seven years?
Seven brutal years where you have to be you?

A very good portrayal of someone who kind of leads a double life, one way with herself, and another with everyone around her. Seven brutal years where she'll have to be herself.
Thought-provoking. Well done, but I must say that the ending,

"Do you even know how to do that?"

Doesn't sound exactly right to me, not sure why, but it's no biggie. Also on the last stanza, 'your' should be 'you're'.

I like it! I'm gonna add it to my faves list!

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| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by blue_65 | [ Reply to This ]

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