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    dots Submission Name: JUNKIE DANdots
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    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 870
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    Description:
       i role play as a junkie on this poem


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    dotsJUNKIE DANdots
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    i want crack
    i want smack
    give me some or ill go wack
    i see you see me on the street
    yes for crack ill suck your meat
    until death crystal meth
    teeth bedraggled rotting breath
    what have i got when nothings left
    mounds of coke to deal my death




    Submitted on 2006-02-28 18:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, that was a rush. I think you would write a lot better without rhyming. It seems that you have a lot to say and although most of the time you get out what you are trying to say, sometimes your words seems to be constricted, such as

    "i see you see me on the street
    yes for crack ill suck your meat"

    But otherwise, i think it was a great poem with a lot of energy, truefulness, and originality.
    Always for real
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a good ryhme...But I agree hopefully you dont do any of this...But seeing as it is a roleplay.. Keep up some good writes...*smiles*
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope that u do not do ne of this and if u do plz get help cause this is not a really funny poem. but the poem was good for it rhymed and it made sense
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Darcey D | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa! that was pretty good! i think it all went together well...i just hope u dont do any of that stuff and i hope no one that u know does it either. i also thought it rhymed good too. anyway good job :)
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by tickles8 | [ Reply to This ]


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