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    dots Submission Name: her non existing calldots
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    Author: elva
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 21/19/9
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       em......i dunno what i meant by writing this poem its a bit weird.


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    dotsher non existing calldots
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    she calls,
    her voice slaying light and giving birth to darkness,
    whispers,
    softly,tormenting you into a non existing slumber,
    her music ,mercieless,independant,alone.
    her eyes , as she lies beside you, they show you a non existing world ,
    where the dammed are are bound and forced to flow, for your non existing pleasure,
    her hair strangling you into a non existing silence,
    it's unbareable,
    yet she just stares, boring, melting her way to your core.
    she crys, calls you,
    through the mists of non existing time.




    Submitted on 2006-03-01 07:06:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it..but it is only a bit weird...not alot weird...lol. it was good. I'm going to check out your other stuff...come by and check out mine, eh?
    xoxox
    me
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a bit wierd I liked it for some reason, it was very exotic. I dunno, I think it has some type of setting to it, like a place that doesnt exist...maaaaybeee
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Bit wierd but I liked it.Rough but the idea is great.More of a vaige story using a few single words to describe each point of it.Relatable I have to admit.Keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good. I think that you did a great job with the flow of things and how u use simple and elegant words to describe what your feeling allowing the reader to better invision whats going on. It was good!
    ohh and thanks for the comment!
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by lost.within.you | [ Reply to This ]



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