Unique, and well written! She sounds like someone that would be hard to ingore, for sure. Perhaps someone who is in fact "bipolar" brought this on? I like how you threw that in there, it fit so well with the entire write. Wherever the idea originated, I think you did a great job bringing it about.
This is an interesting poem I find it odd that you would refer to the rain as bringing soul erosion My beliefs are exactly the opposite There is nothing more beautiful then a thunderstorm as the rain washes all cares away Nice Write Chrystine God Bless Ron
This poems got farly goodsymbolism really quiteimpressive however i wold have to agree on the confusion in your second stanza 'her billowy,rop glows as iftouched with pink and gold' i mean if you could just explain why you chose the colors or somthing... anyway great job though this is a nice poem and if you dont mind i'd love to use it for a school project involving poetry
I like the idea, but I'm not really in love with the word choice. Also, the poem does not conclusively end. If you feel so obliged, go back and either re-write the last stanza, or add something.
also, in the second stanza, you say 'her billowy top glows as if touched with pink and gold' If you could, find something that might give it those colors to touch it with in stead of those colors themselves. This could be worked up into a really good piece!
Bravo! I think you did a very good job with decscribing how your frind is unpredictable. Like most bipoloar moments in life, you never now what to expect. This personafied that fact. Your choose of words, made for great imagery. I truly loved the flow of this one. Great job!