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    dots Submission Name: Stupid Sheepdots

    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStupid Sheepdots

    White waves of fluffy sheep,
    Fading into blissful sleep.
    Celestial cornets quietly hum,
    Mangled minds come undone.

    Pesky picky broody peeps,
    And little Bopeep loses a sheep.
    Clumsy cornets clang offbeat,
    Stupid sheep fall to their feet.

    Crap! Trap! Start again.
    Slowly count from 1 -10.
    Shut, still, quiet please,
    Canít I freaking go to sleep?

    Submitted on 2006-03-01 09:03:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats really cute its like a nursery rhyme but deeper! the ending is the best! I agree with the first comment this deserved more feedback and now it has it
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by emb_er77 | [ Reply to This ]
      THis was just grand and I cannot believe that you have no comments...makes me wonder what kind of audience we have here in this place. I thought you did a great job and I could relate to it and it made me smile!

    Jazmine Mystique Swaim
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Very unorthodox style of writing. Has a wierd but good flow. I enjoyed reading it! Especially the last two lines
    "Shut, still, quiet please,
    Can&#8217;t I freaking go to sleep?"
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the first comment, you should have more feedback encouraging your mind to expand and let out such beautiful words as this.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by CaptainRogers | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow this is absolutely brilliant! funny :D

    i gotta fav this one... i really like it. great flow, and very well written... (useless comment, huh..lol?)

    i especially love the ending. (i have some trouble falling asleep too :P)

    great job, dude..

    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Mud | [ Reply to This ]

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