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    dots Submission Name: A moment in timedots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
        These are poems that me and jon both wrote toghether and I had to filanly except that he waz gone before i put them on here
    Jon wrote Angle of Music for me and
    I wrote Promise me while listening to Phantom of the opera sound track so alot of wrods came from there
    hope that you read these as an offering of my soul and of
    my signifing that Jon is gone and I can't do anything about it DAM IT ALL ANY HOW I would sell my soul to have Jon back here with me right now.
    sorry this is so long it turnned into a journal instead of a description
    ttul
    storm


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    A moment in time a poetry story by stromkrow

    A moment in time worth remmbering is my
    First kiss with Jon
    My last kiss with Jon
    watching Jon leave
    singing with Jon and his family for a concert
    Jon calling me and asking me if i wanted to come up for the summer and Jon calling me his Angel of Music for the first time
    Angel of Music
    Your voice is like an angel
    you are my angel
    sing for me my angel of music
    don't be afraid to show every one your talent little one
    Let your vioce take you were I can not
    I miss you my angel of music
    I miss the way your songs put me to sleep
    I miss the way your lips felt against my forehead as I fell asleep
    I hope you have good melodys now and forever
    Promise me that you'll share you talent with me forever
    Promise me you'll try
    Let me be your light with you right beside me
    In a world of everlasting night
    Love me that is all I ask of you
    Any were you go I will go to
    I gave you your music to make yor song take flight
    and this is how you repay me
    deny me
    and betray me
    He waz bound to love you when he heard you sing
    Now I wish that i had never given you my music
    But what can I say
    Nothing lasts forever
    I love you
    but I will let you go if needs be
    Take wing my angel and fly
    But Promise me you'll rembember me and the good times
    Rembember me in the times you are board
    Angel your hands are cold
    your face is as white as a ghost
    What are you afraid of my Angel
    so fair
    and so
    tender




    Submitted on 2006-03-01 12:32:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a neat way of writing a story/poem. The first thing it reminded me of was Phantom of the Opera. The use of wording and the flow presented me that image. This is a beautiful yet painful story. I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      ohhhh..so sad...to me...
    i liked this so much so
    "First kiss with Jon
    My last kiss with Jon
    watching Jon leave"
    This is your best piece by far..so full of emotion
    i hope to see more of this work from you
    Swanne
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]


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