Expressing how i feel
the hardest promise to heart
with tears forced back
and screams made silent
loudness pierces my soul
drowning my loneliness in blood
with a mask on my face
smiling throughout the day
pretending, acting
is this her?
is this me?
and flowers soaking in the presence of love
going black
dropping
drowning
its passion, dying?
Why? when everything was right
must the love fall apart?
expressing how i feel
is...
the hardest promise to my hear
You had a couple of spelling errors but other than that it was ok. Some of the thoughts were jumbled, not drawn out enough but is still flowed very well.
That is a good write for a 13 year old, keep practicing, I wont be nit picky about spelling or gramatics, you are still young and my recomendation is to keep reading so you increase your vocabulary.
Submission Name: Expressing
