This piece was wonderful and really caught my eyes! You are still a great writer Sorenity! The syllables match in each line. You could make it into two stanza's but there is no need! All is great with this one. Keep up the great work! Later!
i really can't imagine anybody not changing in the space of 15 years. that's just ridiculous. maybe this person should take ur advice and take time out of his day to ask himself if he really knows who he is. this is good. short as hell though
I like minimalism and the value of more in less - this sounded like a song I heard once but I like the simple question it begs - sometimes I think of what I used to think I'd be like and what I actually am like - I like who I am! Great! love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share tif
This is one of those pieces that is incredibly short yet still equally astounding to a longer piece. Simple, direct, and wonderfully worded. "take a look at yourself, are you still your fathers son"-thats the part I think I enjoyed the most. Really though, nicely done!
it's an interesting poem, it asks a fundamental question as to who we are and why we change. do we change because we should? or is it ok to stay the same thru the years? of course you're not talking about a person which makes it even more interesting.. yes intrigues out the wazoo...
one thing though, the first 2 lines could be broken better, but over all, very nicely done.
AHHHH! It's Sorenity! Hey, this poem is writting in the rythm of a song. Are you stoned? I am just kidding. I am crazy! You still think I am coool! I ain't! I am! The poem is eye catching! You disappear for a while and then you reappear! Thank you for popping up with your realism. I am feeling bored and am stunned at what to critique so I must go. One last thing, see you on the Space!