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    Author: nightxassassin
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 51/43/26
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    cant you see that im so bored,
    streaming my fingers through the telephone cord,

    cant go over there she said,
    to the forest we were lead.

    By a unicorn, his name was ted,
    we dressed him up in royal red.

    he drank from the well,
    were spirits were said to dwell.

    A curse arose,
    as strong as the wildest foes,

    We were to late,
    and the color he wore became his unruly fate.

    Listen to the birds that cry,
    on the dawn that poor ted died.

    We'll sing in favor of those long past,
    to remember the days that they still last




    Submitted on 2006-03-01 17:03:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was neat. I really don't know what to make of it. I'm thinking about it on numerous levels. That sounds pompous, but it's true. I'm glad you finished it. I also love the name Ted. It's a grand name. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]
      I have no idea if you're a male or female, but either way... that's the most sensual two sentences I've read in a dog's age.
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]


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