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to my younger self


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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to my younger self



I look into your eyes and see
what I used to be.
The me I was before time came.
The ease you live your life
without the fears
that come with age.
you've yet to turn the page
feel the rage of father time.
I look down at your feet and
feel the beat of the
music that echos
in your steps.
your shoes
with the tall heels.
i recall how good it feels
to stand up straight
so proud so tall.
But I enjoy the
comfort of
easy spirit
and look back
while you wonder forward.




Submitted on 2006-03-01 19:11:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  'Youth is wasted on the young.' I first heard that when I was young and dismissed it as jealousy.

But 'tis not,
'tis not
| Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]
  I appreiciated the irony. My youth was spent thinking about my older self. Youth is mis-spent on the young.
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]
  this captures the feeling of watching peopel grow up so well. i see my brother now going through what i went through at his age and am almost for the chance to be there again.
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by NeonOrangePrize | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one. It captures the young spirit that you remember, it's a beautiful poem that captures all of your thoughts and memories of being a young child. A favorite, maybe?

*darkwinged*
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good
Oh my if we could only go back in time knowing evreything we know now
Hey wait a minute
we can go back in time and visit our past mistakes and then rectify them the positive way
So yes this write is important
This write opened my eyes
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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