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    dots Submission Name: Eulogy For The Rosesdots
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    Author: Black-Wall
    ASL Info:    19 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 60/85/48
    Words: 441
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 231
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2392



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    dotsEulogy For The Rosesdots
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    ::Voice::
    " For this moment we stand in silence, the reflections of that pale face, the echo of that soft voice will live on in the petals we pull"


    A cold blue reflection glides over my gaze as I stand in silence, hands folded over and the light dims and fades. A whisper reminds me of the pain that I must undertake. Pounding Pounding Pounding, I slam my faith right where my life remains. A frail smile cracks the lips of the pale angel that lay in my way.
    Remind me of a world that has been swept back in a red sort of way.
    Remind me of the turns into hate, cutting deep down in my palms.
    I grip my cladstine thoughts and drift into dark.

    Dancing in the light as the crimson tears come shredding down on my bare hands. A eulogy for the roses. A melody played on my angels ears that I wish I could only bear.
    A eulogy washed in ashes of the memories that bloom.
    A eulogy for the rose.

    Was in the hand on my shoulder that sent my world into reality. A fable truth spent by the life of dagger, of poison. As I gather up the blood stained in my hands, I wipe a tear away from that pale statue of the emotions that lay with.
    A fire inside, a pillar of lost thoughts.

    Dancing in the light as the crimson tears come shredding down on my bare hands. A eulogy for the roses. A melody played on my angels ears that I wish I could only bear.
    A eulogy washed in ashes of the memories that bloom.
    A eulogy for the rose.

    Was it a crime to love something that inflicted so much pain. A sinister motion waving deep inside, salute to my reasons that fade and die. Light embraces the darkness of the soul. For a moment in time.
    Reminds me of life, love once lost in the thorn.
    Reminds me of death, casted down by the hand that betrays.

    Feel my pain. Feel the feathers of the angel where she lay. Feel the reflection of the light.
    A eulogy for my heart.
    A eulogy for my soul.
    Cast in ice untill I grow old.

    Dancing in the light as the crimson tears come shredding down on my bare hands. A eulogy for the roses. A melody played on my angels ears that I wish I could only bear.
    A eulogy washed in ashes of the memories that bloom.
    A eulogy for the rose.





    Submitted on 2006-03-01 19:54:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm. it's very dark, and original. Very though provoking, and vivid. I was drawn into the poem, not a usual thing. I really liked it.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, before I burst into tears at the beauty, let me just state that your first line hit me like a rock. It is amazingly powerful. So vivid, and really sucks me into the poem. Makes me want to read more. As for the rest of it, I had to read it a few times before the thing really clicked. It's phenominally deep. I especially love the way you portray the bloody hands (cutting?). It's truly beautiful. This poem sort of paints a picture in my minds, a very beautiful one. That is a very valuable talent. I really hope to see more of your writing.

    *claps*
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by WitlessPagan | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. It adds a little spice to the cliché look on the rose.
    Your imaginary was wonderful, really drifting off into another world, a past regret.
    You took the reader through your pain & heartbreak.
    The emotions were real with your rich & colorful words.
    I would love to hear this put to music, such great lyrics would make a great song.
    There is a typo on the begining of the third stanza, other then that, there is nothing I could suggest to make it better.
    thank you &
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]



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