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    dots Submission Name: heart lessdots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       i dont know. the end rhymes are really mixed up but the work does have a good message i think...tell me what yall think.

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    dotsheart lessdots

    Im left heartless once again
    one would think i learned my lesson by now
    and i keep thinking back to the time when
    your love to me was endowed
    but you ended that promise
    and took away my heart
    and before i had time to repent
    you said we had to part
    now im left here all alone standing in the rain
    cursing the God for whom my faith was in vain
    But now my wound has healed
    but my heart has not returned
    fate has once again dealt
    a hand with which i'll be burnt
    and that ended promise keeps filling me with dread
    and every time it goes by a new question pops into my head
    did you have to leave me?
    did you have to take my heart?
    Why did you act so hastily?
    Why did we have to part?
    was everything we did nothing to you?
    Were all my words in vain?
    Was i just a game to play and get through?
    was your only purpose to cause me disdain?
    the answers to these questions are not easy to find
    and as i search for them more questions pop into my mind
    it seems ill never find the truth behind the things you did to me
    but ill continue searching for the answers through eternity.....

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      The rhyming bounced around, but overall it had a really good message.

    it seems ill never find the truth behind the things you did to me
    but ill continue searching for the answers through eternity...

    I'm sure you'll find somone eventually who will lessen the pain...girls are mean, cold-hearted and evil. ( i know i'm a girl...but...lol)

    I hope this was able to help you relieve some of the pain...
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]

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