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Author: Leon Kennedy
ASL Info:    15/m/La
Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51 /75 /22
Words: 221
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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i dont know. the end rhymes are really mixed up but the work does have a good message i think...tell me what yall think.

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Im left heartless once again
one would think i learned my lesson by now
and i keep thinking back to the time when
your love to me was endowed
but you ended that promise
and took away my heart
and before i had time to repent
you said we had to part
now im left here all alone standing in the rain
cursing the God for whom my faith was in vain
But now my wound has healed
but my heart has not returned
fate has once again dealt
a hand with which i'll be burnt
and that ended promise keeps filling me with dread
and every time it goes by a new question pops into my head
did you have to leave me?
did you have to take my heart?
Why did you act so hastily?
Why did we have to part?
was everything we did nothing to you?
Were all my words in vain?
Was i just a game to play and get through?
was your only purpose to cause me disdain?
the answers to these questions are not easy to find
and as i search for them more questions pop into my mind
it seems ill never find the truth behind the things you did to me
but ill continue searching for the answers through eternity.....

Submitted on 2006-03-01 20:06:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The rhyming bounced around, but overall it had a really good message.

it seems ill never find the truth behind the things you did to me
but ill continue searching for the answers through eternity...

I'm sure you'll find somone eventually who will lessen the pain...girls are mean, cold-hearted and evil. ( i know i'm a

I hope this was able to help you relieve some of the pain...
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]

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