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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsunknowndots
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    i fear the unknown as i take the next step
    following darkness with no one to hold my hand
    waiting for an explanation
    for which there is no time
    bombarded with the facts that do not connect
    i crawl into the gap and scream
    where no one can even hear my mute cries
    and dry tears stream down my face
    hollowing the hopes that i bore within




    Submitted on 2006-03-01 20:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like that a lot. Clever wording, but not going overboard. Short, but long enough to effect. Jolly good
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]
      Darkness in your mind seems to want to be released. So release it already lol.
    The write is clever I do agree a short peace that goes srtaightto the point. There is a nice flow I like this poem alot.
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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