This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: Roula
ASL Info:    18/female
Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46 /64 /45
Words: 67
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
Total Views: 1005
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 390



i fear the unknown as i take the next step
following darkness with no one to hold my hand
waiting for an explanation
for which there is no time
bombarded with the facts that do not connect
i crawl into the gap and scream
where no one can even hear my mute cries
and dry tears stream down my face
hollowing the hopes that i bore within

Submitted on 2006-03-01 20:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  I like that a lot. Clever wording, but not going overboard. Short, but long enough to effect. Jolly good
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]
  Darkness in your mind seems to want to be released. So release it already lol.
The write is clever I do agree a short peace that goes srtaightto the point. There is a nice flow I like this poem alot.
| Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?