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    dots Submission Name: Lanceletdots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I think I'm going much simpler than usual on this one... Going with my feelings instead of my thoughts or fears.

    Lancelet, this is for you.


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    Let me touch your face;
    it's been so long.
    Take down your hair for me
    only once so I can see.
    Look where you dare,
    in my eyes if you are brave.
    Set your storm aside for now;
    drown in the grass with me,
    between the earth's heartbeat and mine.

    Come when you cannot fight it,
    leave when you must.
    This is all I will ever be
    here on the ground
    with no knowledge of heaven
    with neither roots nor wings.

    Lay with me on the common bark
    and touch where you alone can know me.
    I will not leave
    but I will not wait either;
    find me where I dance with no moon.

    Catch me by the arm;
    my love is yours for now
    until there is no more rain
    for both of us to drink,
    until there is no more time to return
    before the light touches the ring of stones
    where your world will begin.




    Submitted on 2006-03-01 22:48:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem wasnt that simple to me.. Sometimes i thought i understood it but then the next i dont. What is the emaning of this poem??? It sounds good and i can relate in some ways. But then i get confussed
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Natie | [ Reply to This ]


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