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    dots Submission Name: lethargydots
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    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       everyones had this day.


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    dotslethargydots
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    there goes my alarm
    i dont want to wake up
    if god could give me arms why cant he lift my legs
    i crawl out and make a cup
    "you have work to do" says the obligator
    i try to be a man, but its hard when im a boy
    what happened to saturday morning cartoons
    what happened to my toys
    why cant i sleep at night
    why do my lids fight the light
    if i could sleep through the rest of my life i would
    id finally die, peaceful
    i wouldnt have missed out
    nothing here is for me to have
    nothing




    Submitted on 2006-03-02 00:17:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Insomnia, ain't it great? I can't sleep at night either. Sometimes you're so tired you could fall asleep walking(or at least I could). It didn't flow well enough for me, but I totally understand what you are saying. Sometimes I write and no one understands it but me, other people read it and are baffled. I guess what I'm trying to say is if it works for you, then who cares what anyone else thinks?
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by vonnie | [ Reply to This ]
      you ever wake up, and wonder... "why the [censored] should I get up?" Goodness knows I do. Sometimes, it takes me hours to find a decent excuse to give a rat's ass. As far as this topic is concerned, I believe you and I park our cars in the same garage. So to speak. Long live deep rooted apathy. Keep it up man.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]
      funny funny funny. i liked it. it was the kind of half-clever half-pissed stuff i like to do which may seem stupid that that is why i like it but ohhh well.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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