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This is a Goodnight Kiss . . .

Author: AptPupilofLife2
ASL Info:    18/M/Berkeley,CA
Elite Ratio:    6.79 - 113 /131 /48
Words: 60
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Hopefully it speaks for itself.

This is a Goodnight Kiss . . .

This is a Goodnight Kiss,
from here to there,
because our stars
still summon my stare.

Maybe if by chance you too,
glance above in search . . .
our eyes might there meet
in the Oblivion Church.

And with our eyes united
by some star above
Then in this distant kiss,
we will both know love.

Submitted on 2006-03-02 02:44:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was short sweet and to the point. i like the way you pulled this together, and i believe a lot of people will be able to relate to this. i'm sure at one point or another, we have all looked up at the moon and the stars, and wondered if the person we care about... is looking up at that same moment, at the same moon and stars... this was a very sweet piece. good work.
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Poetic | [ Reply to This ]
  You're a good kisser. This poem is so sweet and romantic! If only there were more boys like you, guys wouldn' end up being such jerks. I loved it! Please read and comment on anything of mine that you find interesting.
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by clovernfoxglove | [ Reply to This ]
  A long distance love, perhaps? Very soft and sweet, not at all melodramatic. A gentle sort of love poem. I liked this a lot. mae
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]

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