Description: I think it is clear that I'm writing this poem for one my relatives who wants to fall in love and this were my advises to him.. I hope you will all like it.
Be Patient -------------------------------------------
He came closer to me
and whispered in my ears
" When will I fall in love? "
His words were like an
earthquake under my feet.
He astonished, surprised me
with his sweet wishes.
I answered him gently and softly
" Be patient my dear young friend
Love comes softly... Someday
you'll fall in love... So do not
rush things... Do not wonder if
the jug which contains that magical
spell is reachable and allowed
to everyone, simply because it
is God's gift to the humankind.
Take it as an advice from a heart
That has tasted its sweet and
Bitter honey too " Be ware of that
sudden feeling... It could be the
source of your suffering and it
could be your way to paradise.
Thanks for your lovely comment, I had a blast reading it. I read many of your poems, and I found them incredibly sweet (with 89% of them focused on love). I have wondered about you Khaled AbdAllah ! How did you it? How did you move through life and hanged on to an unaltered view of love? I think it amazing.
I like this poem "be patient", it is of course sweet. I particularly liked this part: " Be patient my dear young friend Love comes softly... " I asked myself, how your friend responded,you know to "... someday you'll fall in love". Just out of curiousity, does everybody fall in love sometimes? Dunno. Also, I really loved this image of a jug containing God's gift- aka love spells. I am not clear one thing though, are you questionning love 's availability for every human? Or are you calming his fear( his fear/worry being that even though the gift of love is rightfully his, he may not have access to it)by telling him to give it time. All in all, i liked the candour and sweetness of the poem.
Hey long time no hearing. Where are you? Anyway I think this is one of the best poems I have ever read. It is nice has a great flow and the wording is good. You managed to describe love very well. Well done a lovely poem
Take it as an advice from a heart That has tasted its sweet and Bitter honey too " Be ware of that sudden feeling... It could be the source of your suffering and it could be your way to paradise
Bravo! Now this really is good advice you have given this person. And, I think that says it really is a good write. To me everything was clear as a bell here and other than a few minor typo's I see no need for change. But you know what, everyone has to be burned by love gone bad atleast once to understand the full and true meaning of love. Now that's just my opinion for what it is worth.
great advice i love it ... i guess we all ... or almost all can relate to this one .. when we are teenager , we just want to feel love but it doesnt happen until someone caught your heart ... well keep writing and this a good one thank for sahring and if you have a chance please take a look to my writings peace and love take care and have a nice day Victor
This is so true These are definately words to live by Be careful of looking for Love as Love can also bring pain This is why I dont believe in looking for Love I believe Love will come to you Excellent Write God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
The first stanza is what stuck out the most to me...just powerful wording, actually throughout the entire poem. You did a great job with the advise and you wove a wonderful poem from the experience. Great flow and imagery. Truly a delightful read.