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    dots Submission Name: re: woodsdots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots re: woodsdots
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    The sky shines with such a gleam
    with the bright sun's beam
    the wind blows a gentle breeze
    right nowís the time to seize
    woods set untouched all around
    as I sit I hear not a sound
    the air is still and cool
    the roaring river trickles down in to a pool
    my mind is clear and thought free
    the time right now is the time for me
    sun is starting to set
    but I have nothing to fret
    the river still calms my mind
    while I sit in the woods I find
    crickets chirp sing me to sleep
    I know Iím safe for nothing will creep
    the woods are my protectors
    for people donít take the time to see
    they need to stop hurting her and let her be
    the rivers still calm and sow
    the wind to my back as it does still blow
    woods are my home and the place to be
    if you just try you'll see what I see




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      you missed spelled two world slow and woods but hell who am i to tell you that i miss spell words all the time i love it i honestly do i feel the same way you do bout the woods it does calm a person down it is a fav
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Darcey D | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you really need to go over this again. every line rhymes with the one that follows except for line 17...you had alot of things misspelled in to (into) wods (woods) sow (slow) and this line; "the wind to my back as it does still blow" doesn't seem like it should be said that way... maybe "the wind to my back, it continues to blow"...this poem was ok, i would've enjoyed it much more if you had taken the time to correct or atleast check it over...to me it's sloppy and careless...sorry but true...
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]


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