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    dots Submission Name: Trustdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I trust you with my life.
    I trust you with my heart,
    A well earned prize
    Of which you're the biggest part.
    I trust you with my innocence.
    I trust you with my soul.
    How is it you held me so close,
    And still managed to let me go?
    I trust you with my dreams.
    I trust you with my fears.
    You gave me a reason to breathe.
    You wiped away my tears.
    I trust you with my secrets.
    I trusted you to stay.
    You took everything I had to give
    And threw it all away.
    You've got your perfect little world
    Of which I am still a part.
    Now I trust you with my life,
    But I won't trust you with my heart.

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      This is good
    I believe you are saying in this write that one needs a certain part of themselves to keep there own
    I like how you picked that part as the Heart
    For a heart can be broken quite easily and to protect it is extremely smart
    Great Write!
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Well said...but I am still mad at you so just pretend that this comment is not from me. "sticks out tongue* I liked it because it showed emotion well and it was just really pretty.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      What comes to my mind from this poem is, once bitten twice shy. You are right, you're not going to keep him out of your life but you're still being careful with your most delicate asset - your heart. It makes you wonder if you should even bother taking the risk and trust anyone in the first place. But such is life and we have to live it. We must keep hope alive though and trust again, and believe that our trust/love would be reciprocated. Be encouraged...good write. :-)
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by lilyfleur | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this I've felt this way a hundred times when i was young and being courted ha but when you truely find that someone you trust with all your might then your give them your heart as will and it will be right
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this very much. I liked the way you tell the reader all the ways this person is specail to you and what makes you trust them at first at least. The last two lines were the ones that stood out to me. I think you did a great job.

    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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