Description: This is not a good poem. Just a quick jot-down of feelings for someone who said they put up emotional walls, and in fear of getting hurt they let few in.
Sometimes, you just have to trust that people mean you no harm, and when they say they want to get to know you but then shy away it's out of fear that they may get hurt as well.
Don't keep everyone out because someone in the past hurt you. And sometimes, you have to put yourself out there first to get what you want.....
An Invitation -------------------------------------------
The feelings I have
make my heart ache
I keep them to myself
for our friendship's sake
I tell everyone we're
nothing more than friends
yet I'm left wanting more
at every day's end
The sight of you
puts a smile on my face
and you make me laugh
even on my worst days
We're so comfortable
talking, joking, and such
which makes how I feel
all the more tough
How can I be so selfish
to tell you how I feel
and risk ruining
such a good deal
I don't want to tell you
I don't want to get hurt
risk ruining what I have
for something so unsure.
Please give me a sign
of what I should do
I won't take the next step
if it means losing you.
I think a lot of people can relate to this one... some people are just different. I prefer a relationship with someone I've gotten to know, but others like to start a relationship and get to know the person.
Sadly, the truth of the matter is that your friendship with this person is fading away and growing into love. How long you can stand being his/her friend instead of more is up to you. Some people have bigger thresholds than others with this type of thing. But in the end you have to go for it because... Life is a prison when your in love alone
Ya know, I have a friend just like that. We are very close, and are even touchy-feely with each other. He knows everything about me and I know everything about him. What I will never understand, is why he won't give me a chance as more than I friend. I'm not sure if he even feels the same way about me, but everytime I think about it, I just get goose pimples. I would go so far as to say that I'm desperately in love with him behind his back, and he, he's just totally clueless. You asked for someone to relate to and you've found them. I understand every emotion that you feel in this situation because I've experienced them more than once. Just remember, if you love someone, then you'll see what's best for them, and you might not be their soul mate. Best Luck! ~Clover
This is a really deep write that asks an age old question What does one do when friendship seems to have led to Love You have to realize Love is what created the friendship in the first place Before you move forward make sure it is the best thing for the both of you I wish you Luck God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
I love how you portray the feelings in the poem. I understand everything you've said in the piece, how it could work if things allow. I really don't have that much to say on revising it; although, I do wonder what you meant in the stanza: "We're so comfortable talking, joking, and such which makes how I feel all the more tough??" I don't quite get how it would make you tough. Perhaps you meant how not having the person made you stronger emotionally(?) If so, that's an interesting way to say so. There are a few mistakes for punctuation, but other than that, I like it a lot. It relates to any reader in some way, and that'd good.
I think I know how you feel on this one. I have a good friend of mine that I've known for years. We dated for a month(didn't go so well). We didn't talk much for a few months afterwards, but are now really good friends. I still feel something for her, not as much as I did before, but I still feel something. I think it's a really hard thing for people to go through...having someone so close to you, yet so far. If you're ever bored and looking for good poetry to read she is on eliteskills too. Her username is Darc Archadya. Here is the link to her page. http://www.eliteskills.com/u/Darc+Archadya
I think that you have a really good poem started here. I really liked it.
Submission Name: An Invitation
It relates to any reader in some way, and that'd good.