Description: OK, a very personal piece. Kyle was a buddy of mine and a fellow writer who has since graduated. Our school is in Chester, NH and he once threw milk at me for the hell of it.
The form is Terza Rima, interlocking tercets of aba bcb cdc ded ff, with a volta in the last tercet.
It's going to sound weird, but enjoy!
Todd
Missing Metal Kyle -------------------------------------------
Oh, I’ve secured alone the Chester Square
And passed among the darkness and the light.
I whispered mute the scribe protector’s prayer
and watched the shadows fall, absence of might.
Not long shall I be mending broken walls,
While elsewhere rides a gangling dairy knight
I’m bound within the blackness of my stalls.
I’ve sounded bugle tones and set them free
And blown out fading night reducing calls.
Set firm within my fortress sprouts a tree,
A keep of ink born strident in the night,
Whose fruits bring forth a promised written key.
Incessant tones of madness detonate.
My ramparts hold a certain conjugate
Cigarz Ok I think I know where you are going with this one I can see EXACTLY why you feel this is an important piece If my expactations are correct I hope you feel much better about yourself after writing this as you should Excellent Job Remain Positive Love is evreywhere God Bless Ron
Damn. You twist words so beautifully and truly know how to use them. 'gangling dairy knight'. I got an image in my head there. Bloody fantastic and..hey!... I actually get it! Rae
Yup...this did indeed read very weird to me. I liked everything except the last line...it did not flow right to me. Maybe use another word like segregate or something like that. I liked this very much and think you did a good job writing this. Good write Todd.
I've read this one before, but I didn't really know what to say back then. I guess you can't get anything usefull out of what i'm gonna say now either, but now you know I've read it after all. The rhyming scheme sounds a littl odd, but I like it. It made me think of a fairy tale too, because of the words you used. I don't really get what you were talking about and I could need a little help there.
Submission Name: Missing Metal Kyle
