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    dots Submission Name: Teddydots
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    Author: ebflannery
    ASL Info:    24/
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 184/184/48
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 202
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    dotsTeddydots
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    Cry yourself to sleep, young child
    It will happen no other way
    When you only hear slurred words of hatred
    It is the end of another heartbreaking day
    Hide under your blankets, Teddy in hand
    What else can you do
    When in the distance she screams "Get Out!"
    Teddy will protect you
    For where would you be if he went away
    And only she were there?
    With drink in hand and venom on tongue,
    She can not possibly care
    So cling tightly to Teddy
    You can tell him all your fears
    But be sure to whisper quietly
    So Mommy and Daddy do not hear




    Submitted on 2006-03-02 17:16:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Maybe it's because I'm being too simple minded but I think this poem could have been a little more clear. I'm not entirely sure what this poem is about too (once again, it could be from my simple mindedness)
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Caiss Prejent | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm, a very interesting piece here. it starts off as almost a children's bedtime story of sorts but takes a dark turn (gotta love that). the child seems to be in an abusive environment or home and suffers neglect and quite possibly physical and pyschological abuse. very dark twist there but you still maintained the magic and mystique of spinning a yarn and tale in putting a child to bed.. with the trusty teddy to protect it from the world... even from mum and dad themselves.

    dark, wonderfully tragic and ultimately bittersweet. a fine write. my kind of poetry.

    peace.

    -pietro
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]



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