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    Author: plasmetic101
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 1/2/1
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Story/Dark
    Total Views: 205
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       alright i'm new at writing, i want to get good at writing, stories and poetry.


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    Little timmy went to the store,
    for his mother wanted him nevermore,
    nevermore, then what for?
    Timmy went to the store, only for a meal.

    on the way he passed crime
    where a man was kiled for a dime,
    a dime right from his time
    Timmy was at the store, only for a meal.

    Meals he could not buy,
    Even the 99 cent pie,
    If not a pie then why,
    Why Timmy could not buy a meal from the store.

    Timmy sat on the street,
    Freezing from his head to his feet,
    All he wanted was some heat,
    Timmy went to knock on a door.

    At the door awnswered a man who held out his hand.
    In this moment he heard band,
    A band from he heard a song,
    and in that song he heard angels sing.

    Timmy's funeral was in a day,
    there were few that decided to stay
    for the boy who was never cared for
    except for the man who found in at his door...




    Submitted on 2006-03-02 18:11:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to me, the fact you named the character made it have a less feel and desensitize me. Its not what i normally like but it has something about it that grows on me. I just really dislike the fact you gave "timmy" a name.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by BonafiedRarity | [ Reply to This ]
      Perhaps the name doesn't do it justice...but the concept is cool. You actually think down one path only to find towards the end that something else happened entirely.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by suneideises | [ Reply to This ]



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