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    dots Submission Name: Floorboardsdots

    Author: AdamBoy_s Girl
    Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 1/4/2
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    This is a coming of age piece, very experimental. My favorite part about it is that it kinda of bounces as you read it. Hope you like it!

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    You ask me to tell you my coming of age, my growing old days, and my misconstrued ways.
    I say its in floorboards, under a carpet, under the house, I sometimes call home.

    Wed lay there together, weeping and crying, laughing and smiling and cheating and lying.
    Wed sit there together, eating and drinking, writing and singing and playing along.

    That carpet has seen me, naked in blankets, torn into pieces, and broken in tears
    That carpet has watched me, fall into love, and fall out of love, and fall back again.

    It knows that you hit me and bit me and lied
    It knows that you loved me and knows that you tried
    It knows all your drugs, and your secrets well kept
    It knows where you spoke and it knows where you wept

    I would sometimes sit wasted and burnt on that floor, sweating and freezing and oh so much more.
    I would lay on my back looking at Morrisson, trying to remember when all this had begun.

    We made love on that carpet, through snowstorms and rain, through sunshine and pain, through the loss and the gain.
    We made love on that carpet, in the hopes for the future, dont rip out the sutures, the edges wont mend.

    Always remember, dont forget to toast, lets toast on the coast, youre the host with the most.
    Always make sure your blinds are closed tight, dont let in the cold, but shut out the light.

    Submitted on 2006-03-02 18:47:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow ... this is an AMAZING write. I love the different scenerios and situations in intricate combination. This grabbed my attention and hels it and at the end I found myself wanting more, and most long poems bore me to tears. I love this one. You have some SERIOUS talent.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Psychohenry32 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i hope you know that that is INCREDIBLY good. wow. when poems and such are that long i usually dont have interest to read the whole thing but that it really good. a lot of talent. and it is a really good idea and concept
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by H.a.n.n.a.h | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it! it was long and im not usually able to finish reading long poems, but i stayed hooked! i like how u took something as simple as florboards and gave it all that meaning. you have A LOT of talent...keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by sussysabaslice | [ Reply to This ]

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