Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Veterans of the Snow Warsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 879
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 447



    Description:
       Fantasy memories of a time in Winnipeg, and some discombobulated visions prompted in part by an amber fluid which at the time was supposed to aid digestion and help with my other problem of creating run-on sentences. It did neither.----


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsVeterans of the Snow Warsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Slush,
    The guts of snow
    Soft squashed by
    A multitude
    Host of galoshes,
    Thusly shod the
    Winter people reside
    In the white ice world
    Of Winnipeg Manitoba

    Bone cold wind blown
    Northeners
    Cold blue flame folks
    Dancing like Northern lights
    Flickering Aurora Borealis
    Icicles the medals
    They hang on their eaves
    For recognition....




    Submitted on 2006-03-02 22:57:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This was definilty a cool poem. The only thing that threw me a bit was how you broke up the lines. After the first stanza though, I got used to it. This was definitly original, nice job:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    93555

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    untitled written by ShyOne
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The World written by jjd
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Cover written by saartha
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Love written by saartha

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry