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    dots Submission Name: Veterans of the Snow Warsdots
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    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
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       Fantasy memories of a time in Winnipeg, and some discombobulated visions prompted in part by an amber fluid which at the time was supposed to aid digestion and help with my other problem of creating run-on sentences. It did neither.----


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    dotsVeterans of the Snow Warsdots
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    Slush,
    The guts of snow
    Soft squashed by
    A multitude
    Host of galoshes,
    Thusly shod the
    Winter people reside
    In the white ice world
    Of Winnipeg Manitoba

    Bone cold wind blown
    Northeners
    Cold blue flame folks
    Dancing like Northern lights
    Flickering Aurora Borealis
    Icicles the medals
    They hang on their eaves
    For recognition....




    Submitted on 2006-03-02 22:57:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was definilty a cool poem. The only thing that threw me a bit was how you broke up the lines. After the first stanza though, I got used to it. This was definitly original, nice job:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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