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    dots Submission Name: Chained to Freedomdots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Some of us have so much emotional weight (scars and wounds we don't even know the origin of) we carry around every day wanting nothing else but to break free from them, to breathe easy, to scream them away, to cry until they melt. I came across a meditation technique called vipassana which im really excited about. if u like you can get more info on it at www.dhamma.org after u read the poem.


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    dotsChained to Freedomdots
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    A barbwire ball spinning in my chest;
    An erratic desire to tame unrest;
    Red hot coal dribbling through my flesh;
    Muted screams of the oppressed;
    A world of irrelevance in my head;
    The visor of illusion shines blood red;
    In air this heavy have I lost myself?
    Darkness descends on my cry for help.
    Shhh…

    Have I come here before in regret?
    I hoped it forever, last time I left.
    No hero, no winner, no story did rest,
    A minute in these dungeons so unblessed,
    To sentence the remains
    of Failure’s breath.
    Shhh…

    Drops of rain on a dying leaf
    Breath unfolds an ancient key
    I listen hard for when it speaks
    It speaks from a land beyond the free
    Shhh…




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      Nice, nice, nice! Great irony and hypocrisy throughout the piece. I love the title.
    "Drops of rain on a dying leaf
    Breath unfolds an ancient key..."

    "No hero, no winner, no story did rest,"

    Wonderful description of how pointless and twisted 'society' has made life. Hope to read more from you. I'd apppreciate it if you read some of my works and told me your thoughts.
    Rae
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by losing_focus | [ Reply to This ]
      this is extremely well written and I look forward to reading more of your work. Very powerful and sets the tone for the way society has become
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by CaptainRogers | [ Reply to This ]


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