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    dots Submission Name: The Flamedots

    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 652
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       I love fire. That's the main reason I wrote this one, but it turned into something different. This is about my 7th poem. I think my poems are too straight forward. Please tell me what you think of my poems in general. Thanks!

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    dotsThe Flamedots

    It lives to destroy
    It destroys to live
    A lone warrior
    Sign of true power
    Dancing in the wind

    Wildfire in the veins
    They hold eachother
    Flame combines in one
    Stronger than the first
    Light in the darkness

    Flame calls for respect
    It offers comfort
    in the cold darkness
    But foolish ones will
    burn within their souls

    Submitted on 2006-03-03 11:38:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    5: Wow!

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      in one...i think it should be Into one...idk

    Wildfire in the veins
    wow thats cool u could like write like those chinese shows where eveything is about like angles and going crazy in the head and fighting with huge ass swords...your very creative and paint a nice picture with your words i think its just the way u throw things together like

    Flame calls for respect its almost like your giving it a life like qulity and feeling u could maybe like write one from the eyes of somthing like a rock or water or somthing weird id love to see that...nice job

    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      ah another Pyromaniac so good to know Im not the only one wonderful work and a great peom I love fire and its seem so do you this was a good write with imagery and emotion good work and keep playing with fire
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
      GREAT WRITE! now that, my dear friend, is POETRY! let the words speak for you, let them express emotion, images, and experiences. The imagery in this poem is amazing, I loved the power the words had. They really created a vivid image in my mind. GREAT POEM, KEEP IT UP!
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]

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