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As I feel my way through the universe,
until I reach the grave, my resting place--
let me grab hold of the things that last,
and help me to let go of the those things.
I'm with Graeme on this one. Although I love inspirational pieces, and this is one. You can not grab what you want if you hold on to garbage. This almost mirrors my page qoute when I think about it! lol. Wise words, even if the message was brief. Nice job.
I take this write of speaking perfectly of be careful what you wish for People have to realize the mind is an extremely strong thing Once we put a thought into our mind it is trapped in our subconcious Even if we never think about it it will always be there God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
Mmmm not bad at all, kind of the thing you'd read on a really inspirational poster or something like that.
I'd suggest a different word to "feel" maybe something that shows how fast and furious and hard life is, as at the end of the line you replace grave with "reasting place" so it would be a nice lead up.
Very well done, it says its message well in such a short piece.
Submission Name: a simple view
