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    dots Submission Name: angelsdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 509
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    Description:
       i dont know what inspired this. maybe a song... i know i was high when i wrote this so if that helps then hey. i hope you like it.


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    dotsangelsdots
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    this suicidal angel,
    with hair dyed a deep black,
    she has beauty beyond measure,
    but there's something that she lacks.
    friends are nowhere near her.
    her loved ones don't love back.
    she wants to end this nightmare,
    but her body won't relax.

    she walks on road of glass.
    her feet are always bare.
    she asks why is life like this,
    and why can't things be fair.
    the world beats this angel.
    it rips out all her hair.
    she cries herself to sleep,
    to redream this nightmare.

    she's shaking and can't stop it.
    she can't control her hands.
    she shakes because she's nervous,
    but she'll obey all his comands.
    she bends to wash his feet,
    to wash off all the sand.
    and still she walks on nails,
    'cause this is his demand.

    she's hanging in the noose,
    she did his suicide.
    he asked her for this,
    he told her to die.
    she was always weeping
    tears of blood she'd cry
    another beautiful angel,
    is what he's soon to buy.




    Submitted on 2006-03-03 15:09:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was great i like writing and reading dark poetry
    this is like a posession i like that
    your discriptions were also put together well

    great write
    thanx for your comments
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. very deep.. like the expression of sorrow.. of heart break.. makes me think
    about what the meaning is behind it.. I
    know its a sad state to feel alone I can relate
    so I liked it very much.. and keep up the great work.. will keep my eye out for your new stuff

    Peace
    penny
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      it was great. i loved it.

    the world beats this angel.
    it rips out all her hair.
    she cries herself to sleep,
    to redream this nightmare.

    i think this was my favorite part but it was all great.

    ~SAmm
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      This was dark but I imagine "IT" has deeper reflective meaning of the true you - you are an angel but the world cannot truly harm you - your sorrows and your dreams have wings girl. I really thought you did awesome on this one!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very dark but I loved it.Sad how someone would push someone that far and how a person could live this way.I can relate to the first few stanza's but the rest is just interewsting and beautiful in its own way.Good write keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]


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