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    dots Submission Name: Facade of All Daysdots
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    Author: bonita2689
    ASL Info:    18/f/in
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 42/58/33
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 146
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 793



    Description:
       I know there is probably some punctuation issues but I tried my best with that...I found this cuz I wrote it a while back


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    dotsFacade of All Daysdots
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    your eyes- so sweetly clouded with lies
    you watch, I spiral, then I die
    you overlook the obvious
    it slaughters you
    but we make do
    you do not know me
    this is not my body
    an imposter's clever disguise
    had you fooled easily
    an evil grin
    then you're back again
    this is not my life
    we have yet to meet
    you have not found
    the reality that I seek
    my world becomes a dark maze
    drowning beneath and uncomfortable haze
    a splinter in my finger
    you watch as I grow weaker
    your eyes they pierce me
    my only shield - a forced smile
    my sorrows you file
    crazed, I break
    an innocent devil
    exposed but
    slightly beveled




    Submitted on 2006-03-03 15:23:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What i got from this poem is that you are in, love with someone that is decieving you but you are not real. its kinda confusing so if you could change it to tell a story or whatever it would be cooler. It had a great flow and use of words but the story was unclear. otherwise i liked it so i guess if you want to make the story unobvious then it was written almost perfectly
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Harmageddon | [ Reply to This ]



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