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    dots Submission Name: Cutters lullibyedots
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    Author: Mepo
    ASL Info:    20/M/At War
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 16/28/12
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 216
    Average Vote:    4.3333
    Bytes: 899



    Description:
       no i dont really cut myself, i was just seeing how it "felt" if you know what i mean... i cant imagine ever doing something like that...


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    dotsCutters lullibyedots
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    aching in my fingertips
    the blade moves to and fro,
    a nick a cut a little blood
    the pleasure starts to grow.

    obsession takes over mind,
    and i begin my dance,
    back and forth i cut i slice
    till blood has filled my hands.

    with this blood i wash my heart,
    of torment and my pain,
    i move my obsession to my arms...
    and start the dance again.

    back and forth a liberation,
    my pain becomes my sorce,
    felling better i cut away
    feeling no remorce.

    noone to care noone to cry,
    so alone i wash myself...
    with every cut comes another slice,
    to free me from my cell

    i stop the dance
    and drop my blade
    satisfied i cry,
    with cuts so deep
    alone i weep...
    to a cutters lullibye






    Submitted on 2006-03-03 15:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem desbribes alot, its really neat. the kinda ot fitting part i think is calling it a "dance" it feels orignal because i do think its really good, and probley many people can relate.
    -Ellie
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by SkullMyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, very nice. It's not the best I've read, but it's still good. I liked the rhyming scheme, too, it just gave it a good flow. I really do like it!
    -Jess-
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Vile Deception | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not too into the whole "cuting myself" thing. But if you felt washed and satisfied then it couldn't be all that bad. Nice lullabye. Keep writing...
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by In the Fire... | [ Reply to This ]
      that was really good i think if you wrote like this and keep a journal you could be the next Po. But you could descibe the look and texture of the blood more.
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by death_writer | [ Reply to This ]
      that was great. ive always wondered what goes through somebody's head when they cut themselves like that, and you helped me a little bit. it could be a little bit more descriptive and visual but otherwise, you did an amazing job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by sussysabaslice | [ Reply to This ]
      well nice title for a good writing i think your rhyming was quite good friend... well i like the wording too.. and hope you keep writing ..and if you have a chance read my stuff..
    take care ... and
    peace and love!
    Victor!
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]



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