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a wanted man


Author: sickly
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Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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i received an e-mail from noble house in england requesting a poem and although i have used this title before, i wrote something almost entirely new with the hope in mind that noble house will deem it worthy of publication.nevertheless, it has been a while since i have submitted something to this site although i have been writing all the time.and so, here it is.


a wanted man



open your eyes
you can't deny it
it' not just a fantasy
it's something just for me
as i reign down on thee
feeling the hours in the music
bringing it on
and calling it out
for years to come
and for those who are angry
die hard
without forever
one too many wasted sunsets
one too many for the road
worded magick in a fevered night
so strange
and with such sorrow
fighting to the end
a human target
it's truly what i am
a wanted man




Submitted on 2006-03-03 16:23:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  [censored] you gooof!when you stop eating [censored] i'll stop thinking about what i have to do to make sure that you,re dead before noon tomorrow.
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
  ok here is ur real comment...yeah i couldnt be bothered actauly reading it cuz ur a jerk off but w/e it was good...

Trevor...~
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
  i had to stop by and read this i thank you for your comment
dont get frustrated by human ignorance when people dont comment that means they really dont understand your writers emotion
me myself i like your posts as i too have these things to write about

thanx sandman
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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