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    dots Submission Name: Essencedots
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    Author: Psychohenry32
    ASL Info:    1638/Femail/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 22/33/24
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 215
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    dotsEssencedots
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    One can write the words
    Take the mind to other worlds

    Flashing a light in to the soul
    Burning like a red hot coal

    Into the mind's eye
    Seeing clearly why to cry

    Lost in translation
    Like mental constipation

    Can't think
    Afraid to blink

    Writing long into the lonely night
    Come again most holy light

    Heart on fire
    The need is dire

    To keep on writing
    Keep on fighting




    Submitted on 2006-03-03 18:15:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ach, coolness! I'm grooving on the weaving of the written arts and physical struggle. You've done a great job here.

    The rhyme scheme is a nice touch, and there didn't seem to be any forced ryhmes to give you any trouble.

    You do seem to run into a bit of a cliché (twice) with this couplet, however:

    'Lost in translation
    Like mental constipation'

    I like the shortening of the statements, culminating in the completion.

    Thanks for sharing!

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]



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