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    dots Submission Name: Womendots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       just thinking. say whatever i dont care


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    dotsWomendots
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    Why do people try and stop something that starts as soon as your born
    Women seem to think that as soon as they turn 35 their old and worn
    laser peels, facelifts, implants, and plastic surgery
    thinking that is some small way their managing to hide from father time
    God forbide that women grow old and become wiser over time
    We all need to look the way we did when we were young and knew nothing about the world
    I know im young and yall are probably wondering why im talking about this because im not even an adult yet
    Im talking cause i see young teenagers tryng cover up age that they dont even have yet
    Packing tons of makeup on so noone sees who they realy are
    Whatever all i know is i look up to women aho let their wisdom show with every line and wrinkle they have.




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      aww. gena's having reflections upon the beauty driven society that the world has become. that's so sweet. haha. well this was good. i like the fact that u stand up for this, especially since u yourself happen to be a young woman. no offense ladies. i think ur right though. young kids try to look grown up by wearing make up and dressing more "sexy" but they just come off as slutty and then they start having sex at age 12-13. and the older women try to look younger and thinner cuz that's what's hot in Hollywood right now. the bull[censored] never ends pimp
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice rant. I can't really give good feedback though, it doesn't look like you spent any time editing your work. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree, unless its something you really think needs a little cover up, like a bad pimple and I meen BAD, you really dont need to use a lot of make up. But now in days, girls start wearing make up as soon as they hit 12, I dont get it either. Im with you on that one.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      You're right, people care too much about their looks. Girls who refuse to eat just because there's someone who is thinner as they are, it's ridiculous.
    I'm glad you're not a part of those people, you must be a special person I guess. Tell me if I'm wrong, but that's what I think.
    Anyway, very well done and I completely agree with you.
    Tom
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Tom110989 | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't wear make-up until I in my 20's and only when I went out someplace fancy,I still don't wear it unless I'm going somewhere really important or getting a special picture taken for my family,an all my wrinkle show I figure I earned them I call them my it care'free face
    you did a good job on this piece I liked it a lot
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      Not a bad little lesson to get out there.
    Why ARE people obsessed with their looks? Probably because they're brainwashed into it by the same people that make so much money out of selling them the stuff that they tell them they need.

    Nicely said, well done

    be happy

    graeme
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I couldnt agree with your last line more
    I too look up to a woman who knows beauty is only skin deep
    Great Write
    And this write is also a credit to you
    Bravo
    For thinking ahead to the future instead of looking back at regret
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Although this doesn't strike me as poetry..I love to hear wisdom pouring forth from a 15 year old girl! You are so right and judging from the strength and power behind your correct opinion you could very well be someone who can participate in changing the views of such vain girls/ women and enlightening them that the wisdom and grace that one tries to nurture in the process of growing older is truly what counts and can influence many others that struggle with this issue. Enlightening!
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Jill Lynne | [ Reply to This ]
      Then we will get along just fine. I'm 30 and rarely wear make up. I have all my original body parts, and dare a doctor to come near me with a scapel. lol. You spoke truth and that's what matters most. The most reconstructing I'm doing is losing weight for health reasons now. You stay strong and stick to your guns. You will grow up eventually...why speed it up? And when you get to my age...just love every minute of it and yourself.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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