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    dots Submission Name: The Sundots
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    Author: John Ratliff
    ASL Info:    21/M/OK
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 27/42/20
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 876
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       A look at how things are beautiful and awe inspiring, especially and enibriated dawn.


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    dotsThe Sundots
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    Letís get some rock and roll
    To soothe the soul
    And a bag of grass
    To dull the flash
    Of the sun folding the night,
    Memorizing your movement
    Like a morning movie
    That gratifies its sight.




    Submitted on 2006-03-03 20:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think it would have been a lot better with more description of how the sun makes YOU feel. It was too short to be speaking about something as awesome as the sun.
    I did like all the pretty imagery from the short bits though!
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      thats how the sun makes you feel. hehe thats cool. I like how it rhymes but it doesn't really go well with the sun. sorry if I hurt your feelings.
    bye! < 3
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]


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