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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The vaulted hall is dank and cold,
    with rust and mold
    upon the gleams
    of sunken dreams.

    so silent is the whisp'ring air,
    so hoary-fair
    the spectral stones
    and ages' groans.

    but there amid the ruins dark
    set with no mark,
    is mem'ry's tomb,
    light in the gloom.





    Submitted on 2006-03-03 20:12:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how you shortened some of the words like whisp'ring and mem'ry's. That was very effective to the success of this poem.
    Is hoary a word I don't know or a mistype?
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      The style of your work is extremely impressive. Not only do you write in a more classic style, which i've seen many try to do, you do it very, very, very well. My impression of the subject was that it, like much Gothic (if I may refer to your style as thus) poetry, it is very cryptic, and that really adds to the gloomy, darkened mood. Excellent write.
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry, but I didn't quite get what you're saying, it's there for a second then it's gone, but it does sound kind of neat, I imagine you probably have some potential.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by jakepoop333 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the poem was nicely written and I thnk that the rythm was good as well I didnt quite get what u were trying to say in the poem, i think you should had gone in to detail a bit more
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by lost.within.you | [ Reply to This ]


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