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    Author: Jill Lynne
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 77/92/23
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       Dedicated,read and inscribed on candles for Robert A. Martinez 3-11-85 to 12-01-05
    The most wonderful Texan marine I've ever met..died in the line of duty in Iraq.Reported world wide...we love and miss you and we will never forget you,Robby. The procession that followed was unlike anything my mother has ever seen..Robby was an extended part of our family,God bless him always.


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    My grief changes colors over you
    As the colors that you brought us
    Brilliantly shone through
    At the memory of your laugh
    Your wit
    We became a brighter hue
    And now my grief changes colors over you

    The life in you so brightly lit
    Emanating such this joy
    You will be so sorely missed
    The echo of a hero
    Was the dream of a boy

    And we will never forget
    The rainbow you have left
    As with your heart you always led
    As our grief changes over you.




    Submitted on 2006-03-03 20:16:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      With that bright smile and twinkle in his eyes, he is smiling down on you.

    You did a great job bringing his spirit into your work.

    Robby is a true american hero - he gave all...
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by nurse | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you did a wonderful tribute to Robby,you wrote it with such compassion and feeling that all who read this will surely feel it,
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, and sweet. Im sorry for your loss, by the way you discribed him so vividly in this poem I could tell he must have been a wonderful man. This poem does reach othe heart of others if shone. If you haven't already show it to everyone you know. This tribute is worth showing. You will make it through. :)
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      By using the word "color" without mentioning the US flag it allowed for and expanded image, and still the flag was present in my mind as I read.
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm so sorry for your loss. You did a great job expressing your grief and being postive by remembering good things about your friend allowing thr reader to see how much he was a loss to you and your family. Your poem brought his memory to life and will live on in all aho knew him personally and by your poem left for us to read.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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