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    dots Submission Name: Under the Influencedots
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    Author: Mr_Eff
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 61/62/39
    Words: 459
    Class/Type: Story/Gothic
    Total Views: 200
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    Description:
       This is slightly influence by Stephen King, and Clive Barker. The idea was for a paranormal detective to have escaped death, only to have it catch up with him at a later time. Inbetween these two stories, there's another piece. The part that explains why things would end this way. I'll save that mystery for a later time. The little blue man is supposed to represent the hellbound aspect of suicide. Sort of a... scapegoat.


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    dotsUnder the Influencedots
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    I enter into what appears to be the kitchen
    Impending sense of doom has my head itchin
    Make it across without any opposition
    Open the door to the den, and I can't believe my vision
    In one second, I see every detail of the room
    It had a sickening color, and smelled like a tomb
    The ground became unsteady, somewhat like a waterbed
    The phone was off the hook, with screaming voices of the dead
    There's a desk of oak, with a bowl of fruit upon it
    Behind's a painting of an amish woman in a bonnet
    I turn to leave, the door is gone, and my heart stops in my chest
    In it's place is a picture of the fruit rotting on the desk
    The voices from the phone are crystal clear in my head
    Screaming "Seven before two other times, then you're dead"
    Turned back to the desk, no fruit, bowl or phone
    The dead increasing in volume, but maintain a steady drone
    I try to move forward, but slam head first in the door
    My hand around the knob. Was I leaving? If so, what for?
    Confusion overwhelming, did I walk over to the painting?
    Of the amish girl who's now naked, nipples bleeding, masturbating
    Barely took notice of the gun in my hand
    Pointing it to my dome, about to do me like the man
    I broke the fuck out, in that one moment of sanity
    Burn this whole building down sounds like the best plan to me

    One year later...

    I was travelling home with my groceries one night
    In front of my apartment, I came across quite a sight
    A grotesque beast, with two faces, and three hairs
    Growling and glaring at the top of my stairs
    Dismissed it as nothing, but a common find
    Little did he know there were other things on my mind
    Made it in my apartment, the bags slipping from my hand
    Rushed to the kitchen, and found a little blue man
    Remained rather calm, though my pulse begin to quicken
    He just sat on my counter eating my left over chicken
    "Sorry bout the food, I should have asked if it was okay"
    "Think nothing of it". What else could I say?
    We chatted a bit, about motives, and choice
    He commanded attention, but with a soft, subtle voice
    "Shall we get this show on the road" he asked. In a care-free fashion
    I was surprisingly calm, considering the insanity of my action
    I went into the bathroom, filled the tub and took hold
    Of my courage, then crawlled in, just like I was told
    The man jumped into my body, with an eloquant twist
    And with razor in hand, I slit both my wrists




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